Saturday, August 6, 2011

Virtuous Flash Fiction: Chastity

Carson stood over the bloody body of his daughter Janna. The soiled sheets he found in her hamper nearly told it all. He knew the little tart had been having it on. What he didn't know was the little bastard's name. Janna knew her father demanded chastity and honesty from her. Yet, no matter how hard he beat her, she pleaded innocence. Now she lay dead. His 13-year old, Liza, giggled behind him. "You clueless sod! Those sheets are mine. Been at it with mum's tennis coach for weeks. Janna was the only virgin left in THIS house. Fouled that one up proper, eh??"

15 comments:

  1. Ouch! That was evil!

    So glad you're taking part :)

    A xOuch! That was evil!

    So glad you're taking part :)

    A x

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  2. I promised you Virtuous Evil or Evil Virtue. I deliver. bwuahaha

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  3. Oh, this is fantastic!

    But I've got to ask, does Liza have a death wish?

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  4. I'm trying to work out who is more nuts here - the 13 year old girl who giggles over the bloody body of her sister or the dad who murdered her? Either way it's super creepy - great job!

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  5. Kathy...I think Liza is probably expecting Dad will be too mortified to consider her next. Wonder if she is right. bwuahahaKathy...I think Liza is probably expecting Dad will be too mortified to consider her next. Wonder if she is right. bwuahaha

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  6. I know some psychologists who would turn in their licenses if they were faced with working this case. Good job.

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  7. Thank you Suzanne. Glad to see the piece had the desired effect.

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  8. I think the creepiest part is the idea of a 13-year-old at it with a tennis coach. Please say he turns his wrath on him next!

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  9. Hmm...not sure if he won't just go catatonic next. LOLHmm...not sure if he won't just go catatonic next. LOL

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  10. And here I was trying to make my virtues all saintly... should have gone your route, that was bloody awesome! Since Iam not quite finished with a few of the upandcoming ones, I think I might make my virtues a little more sinful. [avoids the smite stick]

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  11. Lead on McDuff :)Lead on McDuff :)

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  12. BAHAHAH!
    I probably shouldn't laugh, but this was just really good, and so morbidly funny. I love this satire, it's just so healthy after reading everyone else's Virtue posts to come across this one last. Well done!

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  13. Feel free to laugh, I did. Written this way because someone was worried about finding way to write about virtues. Told them virtue didn't HAVE to be a good thing. Glad you liked.

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  14. WHOA!!!!!!!!!

    *Distancing himself from Jeff. Nope, don't know the guy. Never met him. You say he wrote that???!!!*

    This was vicious and twisted all rolled up into one hundred words. And okay, I'll admit it, I LOVED it.

    Kinda scared to read the other six now. Having "pre-nightmares." LOL.

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  15. Yeah, this one is really creepy! And disturbing on enough levels, that if none of the characters go catatonic then maybe I'll have to for them. A real shock to see virtue portrayed as not necessarily a good thing.

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