Tuesday, August 9, 2011

Virtuous Flash Fiction: Diligence

Eileen, Sondra and Janna, "The Three Crones", took every opportunity to defame him. They were why Meredith had left him. The spiteful bitches refused to stop meddling.

She'd told him, though she admired his diligence working so much, she needed a man who was around more. He raged that shows, dinners and such weren't free, so he WORKED for HER!! Nevertheless, the next day she was gone.

That night, The Three Crones each met their death at his hands. A short drive across town tomorrow, and Meredith would get HER just desserts. After all, he sneered, he WAS a diligent man.

12 comments:

  1. This story makes me feel sorry for the guy - working so hard just to be rejected by Meredith.

    The "three crones" are also very diligent in their efforts to defame and riducule him.

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  2. Very good of you to note that they paid the price for THEIR diligence in all of this. :)

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  3. Nice spin on diligence, like you said "they paid the price". Virtues aren't always a good thing.

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  4. Looks to me as though you've married a virtue, diligence, to a sin, anger. Talk about your mixed marriages. ;)

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  5. It bids to be a VERY ugly divorce. :)It bids to be a VERY ugly divorce. :)

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  6. I like that the main character shows diligence in everything he does. It's a really nice thread to run through the story - diligence in his work, and diligence in his revenge. Nice!

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  7. Thanks Lissa. I try to be diligent with the continuity thing. LOL

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  8. Do we get to find out what revenge he is seeking in tomorrows Patience? I mean he has to plan and wait before he shows her a kindness and then nobly declines any recognition of his revenge in humility. :-)

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  9. Only time will tell but I have something else in mind for PatienceOnly time will tell but I have something else in mind for Patience

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  10. I like the way you twisted diligence around and looked at it from different angles - neatly themed!

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  11. Wow... You really are nailing your evil Virtue goal... I wish I had more to say, but I always get to the end of your posts and am shocked beyond words. Really not what I expect with the Heavenly Virtues.
    I like the concept of the "three crones" though, reminds me of the Fates--and can definitely imagine a diligent man not getting on with Fate.

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