Wednesday, August 10, 2011

Virtuous Flash Fiction: Patience

Hayes gripped his scoped rifle...watching the gas station below...waiting. Nine hours later, he saw the vehicle arrive. The punk who'd raped his baby girl to death emerged. Lawyers had freed him...it was over. For Hayes it wasn't over...yet. He breathed, exhaled and squeezed the trigger. The round struck...vaporizing the boy's elbow joint.

Hayes smiled, knowing the injury'd take a year or more to heal fully. He would savor the boy's suffering. In a year, he'd stalk the boy down again. An ankle joint next? He had time and the inclination to wait before deciding.

8 comments:

  1. I like how you turn a virtue in to seemingly something completely different. Intesting how he doesn't kill the bloody moron, but tortures him instead.

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  2. Killing him would be too easy. Better to slowly erode his health and sanity :)

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  3. Excruciating patience... this drips with twisted revenge. Still, nice to see someone with a strong sense of parental responsibility ;)

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  4. Probably what I would do in that caseProbably what I would do in that case

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  5. Ooooooooooh YES! This is AWESOME. I do not condone violence, but I wholeheartedly support this track taken in the fictional world. You packed so much into 100 words, well done!

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  6. I love the dark twist you are putting on these.

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  7. This is dark, yet somehow it seems almost okay, because of the original crime.

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  8. Yeah, this one I loved! That is patience to destroy someone a joint at a time with a year between each shot. I imagine Hayes will be totally insane by the end if he isn't already, to say nothing of his target.

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