Friday, August 19, 2011

Sinful Short Fiction: Envy

Jeremiah frowned as Sheriff Bart Carlson strode by. The twin Colt Peacemakers Carlson carried were his source of power. Jeremiah knew he could be every bit as deadly as the sheriff.

Though Carlson lacked deputies, he rejected every overture by Jeremiah. The sheriff made no bones he felt the boy lacked the qualities required of a lawman.

Jeremiah knew the true reason...the old dog feared being shown up by a younger man.
All of that would change today, Jeremiah grinned. He pulled the shotgun from beneath his duster and unloaded into Carlson's broad back. Out with the old...in with the new.

3 comments:

  1. Hah.

    "Out with the old...in with the new"

    Loved it.

    Glad you decided to go ahead with the 7Sins, you set a new standard!

    A x

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  2. Aww...thanks for the nice feedback. I know I kinda did it bass-ackwards...but had lot of fun with it. Thanks for the ideas.

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  3. Very evocative scene, and especially after your disturbing (in a brilliantly written way) Virtues it is fascinating to get your take on the sins.

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