Thursday, August 11, 2011

Virtuous Flash Fiction: Humility

Mathias peered into the boiling stock pot. He inhaled the thick steam and smiled. With a contented sigh, he reached for the tongs.

Fishing about, he removed the gleaming white skull and placed it on a platter. He appraised it, nodding favorably.

She, it was a female skull, was the ninth and, arguably, finest addition to his collection. As enjoyable as the murders and dismemberings were, his greatest joy lay in admiring his trophies.

Behind him, the TV droned of the discovery of the latest body. Police implored The Butcher to contact them, either for help or to make his demands.

Mathias turned the TV off, frowning. It was a shame. While he dreamed of sharing his wondrous collection with the world, modesty forbade it. Sighing, he returned to contemplating his newest prize.

9 comments:

  1. I think more than modesty should forbade him showing off his collection.
    Love how you described the joy and pride he felt, though it makes my skin crawl.

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  2. I am finding I have something of a talent for those crawly skin tales. Go figure!I am finding I have something of a talent for those crawly skin tales. Go figure!

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  3. Aww...thanks for that positive feedback. :)Aww...thanks for that positive feedback. :)

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  4. Eek. That is creepy! Virtue buried in sin.

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  5. Creepy is becoming my writing niche I thinkCreepy is becoming my writing niche I think

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  6. Haha, I love twisted sorts like this! Great job. :D

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  7. Creepy is good when it's as funny as this. I love his scientific approach and pride, wonderful!

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  8. Another excellent one. I really love it. Especially the twisted aspect that his Virtue, Humility, may keep the authorities from catching him. He's too modest to crow his deranged tastes to the world, but that means many more are likely to die before he is finally caught if he is ever caught at all. I always find those little spots of light make an otherwise abysmally dark character that much creepier.

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