Sunday, August 7, 2011

Virtuous Flash Fiction: Temperance

Maude stood in the hot night air, listening to the buzzsaw snoring of her husband Howard. He sprawled, asleep in his grubby work clothes, his muddy boots soiling the comforter. Maude despaired of him ever changing. She prayed endlessly to no avail. His salvation seemed possible only one way. Softly she prayed.

Lord accept home thy son Howard to thy bosom. Keep him until all shall be brought forth for Final Judgment. Amen. Maude paused every few words to strike downward with the cast-iron carpet beater. By the end of her prayer, Howard's soul was truly free of alcohol's vile temptation.

12 comments:

  1. Forced Temperance... Yeah, I think your posts are going to really turn my conception of Virtue on its head. Brilliant, dark and remorseless. Wow!

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  2. That was scary and kind of disturbing. Love the idea of forcing a virtue upon a person, in this a loved one even.

    I thought at the beginning that Howard was a werewolf or the like, but this was better.

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  3. Thing is, this is exactly what the spouses of alcoholics dream of doing. How did you know? ;)

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  4. Thanks Emilia. Howard was nothing so fantastic as a werewolf...just a drunk.

    Suzanne...I used to drink...a LOT. Just put shoe on other foot. Thanks Emilia. Howard was nothing so fantastic as a werewolf...just a drunk.

    Suzanne...I used to drink...a LOT. Just put shoe on other foot.

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  5. LOL, Heavenly Virtue Boot Camp. There's some interesting co-dependency issues going on here - does she think to save him by taking the sin of murder on herself? Someone send that lady to an Al Anon meeting! Seriously though, this has something of real tragedy and pathos about it. I think it's her intensity, as she does the deed. It's very thought provoking.

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  6. Aww...thank you. I was going for just a simple bludgeoning but I suppose one might find more to it. :)Aww...thank you. I was going for just a simple bludgeoning but I suppose one might find more to it. :)

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  7. Are all of your virtues going to be forced upon the sinners? That is truly an awesome twist! Beat the sin out of them! Tha's definately one way of repentence.

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  8. They are all going to explore how virtue may not always be a good thing. (see exploration of New World for associated examples) Glad you are enjoying reading these as much as I am enjoying finding the latest twist. Charity promises to be a real lulu with what I have in mind :)They are all going to explore how virtue may not always be a good thing. (see exploration of New World for associated examples) Glad you are enjoying reading these as much as I am enjoying finding the latest twist. Charity promises to be a real lulu with what I have in mind :)

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  9. Nice twist. It raises lots of intriguing notions about what type of a person Maude really is and what her fate will be.

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  10. She will get what she deserves in the afterlife I am sure. Bwuahaha

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  11. This one made me laugh as well. I love the way you are showcasing the virtues. Well done.

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