Friday, March 16, 2012

The Longing For Home



Bobisu stared at the lead-gray eastern sky with a sense of longing. That would be the vector from which the ship would come. They could not arrive one minute too soon for her.

After five years on this backwater world she was ready. The indecencies these primitive hominids wrought upon their delicate ecosystem had left her sick at heart. She was unsure if her people could or would help them avoid their imminent, self-inflicted demise.
The only thing she WAS sure of was how good it would feel to frolic in the sweet grass of home with her beloved littermates.

16 comments:

  1. Loved It!!! Wow, could be the start of a book. All the dogs on Earth... aliens from another world!

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  2. Great take on the prompt. I need to have a chat with my dog, convince him I'm not a 'primitive hominid'. haha

    Here's mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/03/15/friday-fictioneers-2/

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    1. The dog will feign ignorance of course.

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  3. Hilarious! Sharply written too.

    Here's mine: http://furiousfictions.com. And I hope you also have time to check out D.S. Sulaitis' terrific story, "The Lovers," which I posted on Tuesday,.

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  4. LOL Jeff, nicely done. Loved the alien idea and how she just couldn't understand the stupid humans. Well done.

    Here's mine:
    http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/03/outside-of-dog-100words-for.html

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  5. Jeffrey--We both went for puzzlement over the actions of humans--"Dogs should rule." :-) Well done--I enjoyed your alien twist immensely.

    mine: www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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  6. Ohhh.. really nice. So the dogs are getting fed up with us and our ways. This was a nice take on the prompt - loved it.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/straight-talking-friday-fictioneers-16-march-2012/

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  7. It looks like the dogs will be taking over after all. That'll teach us humans for messing everything up. Nice job. Here's mine:
    www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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  8. The "primitive hominids" irritate me too, sometimes. I side with the dog/alien.

    ~Susan (Here's mine: http://www.susanwenzel.com/)

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    1. Jeffrey,

      Wouldn't the second part be Klingon, not Romulan, so you have one really Doggon character? ;)

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  10. Alien dogs. Yesss! Loo. Nice work.

    My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/03/15/a-little-longer/

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  11. Well, if you based the repuatation of humans on how they treat the animals on the planet, I'd say primitive is deserved. Reminiscent of Animal Farm, except Orwell used pigs to make a similar comment. Very creative!
    Here's mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

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  12. Many of us are well aware that the canine species if far superior. Nicely told.

    Here's my story: http://wp.me/p24aJS-3m

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  13. Very interesting take on the prompt, and I loved your spelling of Bobby Sue. I liked that a lot!

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  14. Thank you. I wanted to keep the integrity of her name while adding the alien persona.

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