Friday, April 6, 2012

By Memories Drawn



I love coming here. No matter what else I may have to contend with, here it is different. There is calm. There is repose. The tumult of the world gives over to the kiss of the sun, a wafting breeze, the green scent of new-budded life and the soft susurrus of the water against the muddy banks.

I have come back to this place every year for longer than I can recall. I am drawn here with a melancholy sense of longing for that which can never be again. While I no longer recall which of the mossy rocks it was I struck my head against, I never forget the peace I felt in dying here so very long ago. 

10 comments:

  1. Oh YES! Absolutely brilliant! In reading this, all I thought was 'Poe, Poe, Poe!' Bravo!!

    Here is my contribution. No Poe. Just fun. :)

    http://jhardyb.wordpress.com/2012/04/06/100-word-friday-fictioneers-11/

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  2. Oooh! Lovely twist in the tail here. Lulls the reader and then slam! ..

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/04/06/reaching-a-conclusion-friday-fictioneers-april-2012/

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  3. I learned a new word today in "susurrus" so thank you for that! As to the story itself, it's very well written and the twist is both chilling and sad.

    Mine is this-a-way:
    http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/04/06/fridayfictioneers-catfishing/

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  4. Wonderful! I know a spot like that -- i already haunt it in my dreams--perhaps I shall be privileged in death. Beautifully written for a bittersweet tale.

    Mine: www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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  5. Ahhh...a moment of peace in the afterlife. Nice turn at the end. I enjoyed it greatly. What a well written piece! Thank you for sharing.

    ~Susan (Here's mine: http://www.susanwenzel.com/)

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  6. Excellent work. So seldom do you see a happy haunter and you've chosen such beautiful nuanced language. Loved it!

    http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/04/down-by-the-river-friday-fictioneers1.html

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  7. Brilliant!!! I was caught up in the beauty of it. Loved every word. And the ending made me gasp...literally. Didn't see it coming. I'm about halfway through the stories but this is by far my favorite. Thank you for this. Here's mine:
    www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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  8. Brilliant! i quite agree with Lora up here totally!

    https://seewilliams.wordpress.com/2012/04/06/f-is-for-flash-fiction/

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  9. Congratulations on a wonderfully well written story. Your command of language is remarkable and the imagery you paint with words is nothing short of lovely. 'Susurrus' was a new one to me too. I always enjoy learning new words.
    Your story presents someone in the afterlife in a haunting but instead of the usual limbo/anguish, we have this feeling of serenity. A nice idea. Thanks for sharing :-)

    Here's my offering this week:

    http://andyfloodwritersblog.wordpress.com/2012/04/06/the-lasting-kind/

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  10. Yes, I learned a new word too and love the combination rendered in soft susurrus. Wonderful passage, I enjoyed it tremendously.

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