Thursday, May 31, 2012

An Old Dog's Trick


A holographic matrix, light-bending technology and even more arcane technological methods made the XIS-25 the first plane that would be invisible, not only to electronics, but even to the naked eye.

As an old fighter jock turned test pilot, Fortescue wasn’t sure he liked the idea. There was no artistry, no skill to flying it. It was the harbinger of a new age in which he didn’t belong. Or was it?


Setting the craft into a steep dive over the volcanic glass hills, he wondered how long it would take them to find invisible wreckage against such a stark background.

16 comments:

  1. Whoa. Makes me wonder precisely why he's doing it. Great job. http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers-5/

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  2. Now that would be one way to end your career in a quite a spectacular suicide. Nice job with a great bit of tension at the end leaving the reader with a 'will he or won't he' question mark.

    Here's mine too: Here's mine: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers-too-near-the-sun/

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  3. Invisible plane - great stuff. 'Volcanic glass hills' has a good ring to it, too.

    Ours is at http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/time-is-running-out

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  4. Had to go back and read it twice to make sure it said what I though it said. Very unexpected and that's what I loved about it. Here's mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/06/01/payback/

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  5. Wow. Just wow. I've worked with pilots, fighter pilots, and I can see them doing something like that. Very nice...

    My try: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/30/friday-fictioneers-1-june-2012-the-conquerer/

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  6. What or who must have driven an old guard like that to suicide? Invisible plane! Now that is something else. Well done. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/fridayfictioneers-my-pilot/ Celestine.

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  7. So many different questions posed by such a short piece. Will he or won't he? Why is he so angry? Will they locate the wreckage. Awesome job.

    http://whimsicalquestsofacuriousmind.blogspot.com/

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  8. Pretty funny, I thought. The flipside of the great idea of an invisible plane: invisible wreckage. Nice one. I liked the name Fortescue as well.

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  9. Going out with a bang and a challenge to their advanced technology. I like Fortescue. Something tells me that they didn't treat him with as much respect as they should have.

    I'm here: http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers-1st-june/

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  10. Turn sixty degrees to the right in that phot and you'd be looking out over the Pohakuloa Training Grounds, a huge expanse of hot, dusty lava used by our military for all sorts of live fire training exercises. Many is the night when I have heard (but not seen) jets zooming low across the saddle between the summits of Mauna Loa and Mauna Kea.

    Your story is a lot closer to the truth than you know. Very well done. (By the way, it takes forever to find plane wrecks that aren't invisible up there so I think Fortescue has given the authorities a tough nut to crack.)

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/poliahu-at-dawn/

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  11. Wow. Sometimes you hit one over the fence without even knowing it. I had a hunch as to the general location. Thanks for the added validation. Figured it would be some nasty terrain to have to schlep about looking for anything.

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  12. Great voice, great turn at the end, and really nice way of using just the right amount of detail to bring us into this imagined future (I'm a science nerd, so I'm pretty interested in metamaterials if that's where this is springing from). Nice job!

    Brian (http://pinionpost.com/2012/06/01/gradens-climb/)

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  13. Got to echo all of the above, Jeffrey. Nice little concise plot and filled with pleasant little flourishes, such as the invisible plane, and the glass hills, and the final joke on the present, leaving an invisible wreck, impossible to find.
    Nice one,
    yours as always,
    Lindaura
    and if you haven't seen this one yet, here I am:
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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  14. Cool. After the first paragraph you had me rescanning the image for something that might seem like a blur of aircraft.

    Here's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/05/30/flash-fiction-friday-an-addiction/

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  15. I like it! An invisible object could work with pretty much any of these prompts; I'll have to remember that!
    Here's mine: http://stonesoupnovelist.com/2012/05/31/a-scene-something-on-the-horizon/

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  16. I hope Fortescue ejects before the plane crashes.

    Here's mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/01/the-standpoint/

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