Thursday, June 7, 2012

Critical Thinking Exercise


“Well dang it all, Dave. We can’t just keep floatin’ around in this contraption forever, can we?”

“No, I reckon we can’t Jeb. But you just take them binoculars and take a real good look see down below. Now, do it look like all them folks down there has decided to stop tryin’ to eat each other yet?”

“Naw, Dave. Don’t look like nothin’ of the sort. Hell, they look a mite more riled up than yesterday.”

“Yep. So, while we may not be able to stay up here forever I do reckon a little while longer do seem prudent.”

16 comments:

  1. Nice one. Lighthearted with a wee tinge of social critique ;)

    mine: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/friday-fictioneer-spread-your-wings-and-fly/

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  2. Loved the dialect. Sounds like they entertained some common sense. Good job!

    mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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  3. ZOMBIES. Fabulous job - and the dialect was well handled. http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/06/08/friday-fictioneers-6/

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  4. I think I'd stay up in the air, too. Fun piece.
    mine is here: www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/06/wings.html

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  5. Nice take! I can relate on a few levels.....

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  6. Pretty funny take on that innocent blimp floating around in the nice blue sky. You have certainly populated the planet and the blimp with some pretty unattractive folks. But, stupid as they seem, the blimp folk do get our sympathies and I hope you let them float a mite longer, at least until the ground folk finish their dinners.
    Yours as ever,
    Laura
    and here I am again:
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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  7. Floating secure above a Zombie Cannibal Hell! The blimp should be named General Lee, after the Dukes of Hazzard car, flying through the air, as it often did, forever.

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  8. I love me a good zombie story! Nicely done!!! Here's mine: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/06/07/friday-fictioneers-6812/

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  9. A good and funny take on the prompt. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/fridayfictioneers-emily/

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  10. oops. Zombies uh. Good one. Had to LOL after the line ,"...do it look like all them folks down there has decided to stop tryin’ to eat each other yet?”
    Well, that blimp is taking them down at some point. Hopefully they don't get eaten too...
    In the meantime, shall we go up? : http://niftitalks.com/2012/06/08/up/

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  11. LOL, I had a good giggle at this one. I think they are better off staying up in their balloon!
    I'm over here:
    http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/friday-fiction-blimps-and-balloons/

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  12. That was very funny! I had a good chuckle. Thank you.

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  13. I love the dialog, and the old dang-it flavor of the conversation. I'd hang in the sky over a visit to the local cannibals myself!
    cheers,
    Laura
    http://www.westcoastwriters.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-fictioneers-above-clouds.html

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  14. Funny dialogue. I like the southern accent.
    I wonder how long they'll stay up there.

    Here's mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/08/radiant-flight/

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  15. The air is definitely the place to be when things are not quite right with society. Excellent way of looking at the prompt. :-)

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  16. Dear Jeffrey,

    A great story with one too many 'do's' in the last paragraph. Was it me, i'd 86 the first one. Dialect and twang in your voices are perfect and the chaos below is ominous and, from the sounds of it, carnivorous. Lovely stuff. i'd stay up, like a wrinkled and barely floating party balloon, until I couldn't anymore.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/joining-a-murmuration-or-bud-cowarts-view/

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