Friday, July 6, 2012

Dream Home



Olivia looked at the “house” with obvious dismay. “You bought this? I mean, you actually saw this place and the location before we sold the brownstone and you still bought it?!?”

Stephen appeared crestfallen. “Baby, sweetie! We’ve been talking for years about getting out of the city. We’ve talked about how nice it would be for the kids to have a big yard to play in without worrying about getting hit by a bus. This is it. This is our dream home!”

Olivia turned and walked away. “I’ll be in the car when you’re ready to go back to civilization.”



13 comments:

  1. Dear Jeffrey,

    hey, you know, bus, rattlesnake, what's the difference?

    Great slice of life, this one. Me? i'll take the desert.

    Aloha,

    Doug
    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/nurture-or-nature/

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  2. Oh dear . . . just a slight misjudgement! Mind you, I think my husband would quite like the remoteness, as long as we could get the groceries delivered lol.

    Nice illustration of how perspectives differ.

    Ours is in the Links collection, but for others:
    http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/searching-for-sarah

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  3. One person's dream is another's nightmare. Personally I would go for the hut.

    http://freejournowriter.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/friday-fictioneers-solitude/

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  4. Green Acres is the place for me...I rather sympathized with the wife. Good story though.

    http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/07/encampment.html

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  5. I hate it when people spring surprises... I can just imagine how she feels. Well done.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/the-female-of-the-species-friday-fictioneers-july-2012/

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  6. You depict this relationship perfectly - I love the woman's voice! Nicely done.

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  7. That's harsh, but real. I wouldn't want to be in his shoes.
    Well written.

    http://logo-ligi.com/2012/07/06/healing/

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  8. Oh heck, he's sure gone and done it! Rule 1: never assume. Rule 2: never assume. Rule 3: never buy a run-down pile of bricks and expect your other half to "see" your vision. Still, he sounds like a romantic sort and maybe she'll come round.

    I'm here: http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/the-house-that-jack-built-ff-6712/

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  9. Oh that poor woman. What a disaster. Back to civilization for me as well. Nice work. I'm on the list.

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  10. Let her see a couple of sunsets and sunrises she'll change her mind. Well except for the lack of an indoor toilet and the dry well. Oh, and they're off the grid.

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  11. oh dear...he must be so disappointed, but so was she. Expectations expectations!

    http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/

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  12. Hey, I've gotta say I'm with Stephen (though the brownstones in Boston are awfully nice...). I love his reaction "Baby, sweetie!" Nice character profiles.

    Brian (http://pinionpost.com/2012/07/06/kyawe/)

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  13. Haha! I can relate to Olivia's reaction! This was a great slice of life sort of eavesdrop. I loved it.

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