Thursday, August 16, 2012

In Darkness Peace


It is only when I am enshrouded and embraced by the cool, serene anonymity of the darkness that I am ever, truly, at peace. By day, this is the domain of taxi cabs and trains, of street vendors and shopkeepers, of bustling throngs of humanity with places to go and things to do in which I have no part. I am no longer like them, no longer free and at ease to wander amidst and among them as if I had either an entitlement or a need for belonging. 

I am the forgotten, overlooked and understated husk of a once productive and needful personage who one day chose to turn and leave it all behind. I understand the darkness and the peace that it brings more fully and more respectfully than I ever did as a being of the light.


This story was written for the Five Sentence Fiction prompt: Night 

8 comments:

  1. Tragic and defiant. I'm not sure but that this is a man waiting to enter a new "needful" life...

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  2. My impression of him is that he's happy to be out and unlikely to fly back into his cage. But, you may be right.

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  3. Very powerful piece, Jeffrey. I've yet to write mine. This one has me kind of stumped.

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  4. Strong and haunting, Jeffrey. To me it would seem that the dark provides a cloak of safety as well as anonymity. It's like being feeling safer in a crowd of people. Nicely done :)))

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  5. Properly dark Jeff. Gave me the creeps a bit!

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  6. It's been said above, but you captured the darkness just right. The style is nice, slightly overwrought, which gives it a "Interview with a vampire" kind of feel - baroque. Nice job!

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  7. Haunting! Love your choice of words... embraced/enshrouded...
    It seems as if darkness affords your character the peace and freedom he never knew before.

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  8. He can't stand the day, but he is lonely at night...I can feel it. Thought-provoking piece!

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