Wednesday, September 26, 2012

Jersey Girl Woes


Waiting for the downtown streetcar, Elsie wondered why she let an insensitive brute like Ferdinand make her feel so inferior. While he had those suave European manners and a veritable herd of girls to choose from, that didn’t give him leave to bulldoze over her feelings the way he did.


The streetcar rumbled up and she saw, with dismay, the passengers crowded in like so many cattle. Struggling aboard, she was mortified when the driver’s hands shoved on her ample backside, like it was a grocer’s roast, urging her forward. She sobbed quietly. Tomorrow, for sure, she’d start that alfalfa diet.



This story was written for Visual Dare #24: Frustrated

7 comments:

  1. That's a great take on the story - love all the cattle references - perfectly fits the picture!

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  2. What a great way to use this photo for inspiration. I'm still looking for my story. I hope I come up with something as credible.

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  3. Wow. Loads of tongue-in-cheek irony here, and yet so quietly tragic. All the bovine references were very well placed, not overdone. Great take on the prompt! Another triumph from the Latinum Vault! :)

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  4. great portrayal of dismay and being overwhelmed by the 'herd'

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  5. Very clever! I love how you've taken the literal into the metaphorical.

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  7. Ok trying again as fingers lost the plot.

    Another gem, loved all the cow references great take on the prompt :)

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