Thursday, October 11, 2012

Strange Days Indeed


Tom wasn’t sure whether to lay the blame on fatigue from working the night shift or just the usual morning hassles getting Justin up and ready for school, but they were both going to be late today. 

Somehow, he’d forgotten they were doing construction on the 405 and the crowded bypass ensured there was no way he’d get his brother dropped off and get to his first class at the community college on time.

Things had been a helluva lot easier before his folks had gotten themselves creamed by that drunk driver last summer, leaving him and Justin to fend for themselves. Now, instead of a football scholarship to State and a chance to make something of himself, Tom had been forced to put his life on hold for the sake of his brother.

The Universe’s sense of irony was not lost on him as John Lennon’s tune, “Beautiful Boy”, came across on the truck's stereo reminding him life really IS what happens to you while you’re busy making other plans. 


This story was written for the weekly Five Sentence Fiction prompt: Detour.

9 comments:

  1. Another sad tale beautifully written as always. you must come over to reravelling and read mine I've done light and funny!

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  2. This resonates with me. We all get curve balls thrown at us and it's how we deal with those that really defines us. Thanks for posting.

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  3. Duty can be painful, necessary, but painful. Enjoyed this.

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  4. That one hits home for many of us, I feel. Great feeling in that piece, congratulations, job well done.

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  5. Sad and very life-like.

    Well done.

    Too bad there was no detour off the 405.

    JzB

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  6. Good stuff. I really liked the turn in he third sentence. Sometimes you have to be the one that shoulders the burden.

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  7. Life is full of twists and turns, it's how you deal with them that counts. This shows that so well.

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  8. Very touching and beautifully expressed. You managed to give us a fully-realized protagonist, which can be tough in these short pieces. Yes, quite a detour, but I have a feeling this young man is still going to make something wonderful of himself. Very interesting use of the prompt.

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  9. I thought that was a finely crafted story. Well done.

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