Friday, November 23, 2012

Guilt Of The Guide


His bronze face frozen in an obscene leer, he could only watch, with equal portions of impotent silence and unassailable sadness, as his disembodied metal hand pointed the way to the selfsame mysteries he had sought so long ago. 

Those hapless seekers would learn, all too soon, such things as “unspeakable horror” and “evil personified” were not intangible concepts but, in fact, all too real and all too inescapable.

While he understood the price for his curiosity and eventual trespass into the land of eternal damnation was guiding others to the same fate, understanding did little to assuage his guilt.




This story was written for the weekly Friday Fictioneers flash fiction prompt, based upon a photo by Joyce Johnson.

14 comments:

  1. Excellent choice of adjectives in particular and descriptive words in general! I really like this. And all in only three sentences.

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  2. Definitely chilling. I'm thankful that it's set in a mean little world alien to our own, though we all fear this one sometimes! I really love it that his leer is not an expression of his own total personality, but a perversion of it, and that he--curious, impotent, sad--is not the man we see in that awful face. I hadn't thought of that possibility for a human face, but it's true to all of us! Art, or a photo, or a chance encounter, can capture only a moment of a whole life, of a whole personality. Well done.

    Mine, much more shallow, is here: http://wrasselings.blogspot.com/2012/11/friday-fictioneers-press-conference.html

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  3. Hi Jeffrey,
    At least your character feels guilt. Most of the villains from these dark tales seem to have no conscience. Ron

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  4. The culprit is the first victim in dark deeds, like this story a lot.

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  5. and guilt is a powerful being. well done.

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  6. I enjoyed this. You brought us there without any disappointment, capturing the essence of your character like the plaque on the wall.

    Tom

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  7. yes, evil exists... as he too well knows. Nicely done.

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  8. This was hauntingly beautiful. I loved his quiet regret, his acknowledgement of his folly, and his acceptance of his punishment, even while suffering with the guilt of pointing others to damnation. Very well done!

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  9. I see some slight resemblance to my story this week!
    I think yours is scarier :-)

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  10. Dear Jeffrey,

    Eternal damnation personified. A very good take on the prompt and a lesson to boot. Well doen.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  11. Wonder if there is a whole room full of "hapless seekers" somewhere. Well done. (RogRites)

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