Tuesday, November 27, 2012

Monday Mixer Results, Week 5

Thanks go out to all of those who came out to mix things up this week. As always, you provided me with some very entertaining reading. With no NaNo going on next week, hopefully we will see a tremendous upswing in the number of entries, so be prepared to work hard for the top honors.  Due to the number of entries this week, everyone will be receiving some recognition. Now...on to the good stuff.

The Honorable Mention honorees are presented in no particular order.

JB Lacaden for his story The Griffin. I'm a sucker for dangerous mythological creatures in a story and this provided a great example of one. The tale was exciting, combining a blend of danger, combat and magic. I would note, in a story of so short a word count, the repetition of the character's name as well as a few other words detracted from its impact. I suggest exploring different ways to employ names/elements already previously mentioned in order to increase the story's impact and flow.

My Write Side Sam for her story Jack and Jill. I am, also, a sucker for clever takes on classic fairy tales/nursery rhymes and this was nicely done. You managed to weave an exciting and compelling story while also working in five of the word prompts. The story did contain, about mid-way through, an incomplete sentence that detracted from the flow and understanding of the story a bit. Having done so, myself, I recognized this as having probably occurred during that annoying phase of paring down a story to meet word count. Always a good idea to give a completed entry a final read-over to catch stuff like that.

Lori for her untitled story. I'm delighted and surprised the prompts led to two different stories featuring a griffin/gryphon. This was a very fanciful story making use of considerable imagination and some strong imagery to fit a lot into a little space. The story did suffer from some technical issues, most notably being that "eminent" and "imminent" are two words with a disturbingly superficial sameness but with very different meanings. 

drmagoo for his untitled story. This was a superb read, pulling right along with no clear idea exactly where it was headed until the very final words. That requires real artistry in so short a space. The prompt words are worked in naturally and contribute to a very nice overall feel without being in the least bit noticeable. 

Lisa McCourt Hollar for her story Holographic Adventure.  This was a truly remarkable and entertaining bit of Star Trek-based fan fiction.  Combining all nine of the prompt words was, as usual for Lisa, seemingly effortless. By making use of holographs as a plot device, otherwise disparate elements could be worked in side-by-side without it seeming unusual or contrived.

L.T. Dalin for her story Dangerous Fantasy. I'm, also, a sucker for any story that ends with someone going airborne without the aid of a parachute to mitigate their fall. Using a number of the prompt words, L.T. provides a story I could, literally, see, hear and smell with the great detailing. The story unwound very logically, naturally and entertainingly with a most enjoyable ending. Well, maybe not all that enjoyable for a certain pig named Alfred.

Please bear in mind my decisions are entirely subjective and may not find favor or agreement with all, but decisions are like that. For those writers not mentioned, no slight is intended and I hope next week will find you back for more.

Here is the link to view and read all of the truly inspired offerings for this week.  Please show a little Monday Mixer love and make a point of clicking on each entry and checking them out. Remember, each link clicked on takes you directly to that particular writer's page and provides them blog traffic and, hopefully, feedback to encourage them to come out & play next week.


  1. As the judging is subjective I will still offer my disagree that Lisa's was the best story. You simply chose not to pick hers because it put Klingons in a bad light. As for mine, I can't believe I spelled imminent incorrectly. thanks for hosting this, it was fun.

  2. Thanks for the HM, I had a lot of fun with this, though I'm not sure what incomplete sentence you are seeing.If you could shed some light on that I would be appreciative.

    1. And I see it now, thanks to my English teaching friend. Funny, I came up a few words short, and never caught on to the incomplete sentence, LOL.