Saturday, December 1, 2012

Redemption









This story was written for the premier prompt of the new Business Card Fiction flash fiction challenge. Come out and try this most interesting and unique challenge.

8 comments:

  1. Hey, big guy! Great little tale you have here!

    Your blog is cool as well. Glad I visited. I'll be back more often!

    Blaze

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  2. Really enjoyed the rhythm of this piece, and the restrained way you've captured his hope, however realistic or unrealistic it may be. Beautifully done!

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  3. nice story, jeff! the image really fits well with the mood of your piece :)

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  4. Redemption and hope...there's a spark of hope that keeps his tale alive!

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  5. Great story Jeff.
    You could almost feel his thoughts moving one way then the next in rythm with the tram

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  6. Nice story mate, I am glad you left it for us to decide if it's a happy ending or not

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  7. So much power and longing in these lines. Powerful storytelling!

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  8. Ruth is spot on calling this story 'powerful' Awesome writing!!

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