Thursday, February 28, 2013

Life Beyond Life


Had Thomas been a man of a more metaphysical bent and had he been provided any information regarding the nature of continued existence beyond the corporeal realm, he supposed his present situation might be very different. 

In all fairness, he reflected, he hadn’t been in the best set of circumstances on his final night amongst the living. After nearly five years with Dina, she’d not only left him in an emotional lurch but had emptied his bank account and taken everything of value from their modest flat.

The combination of pills and booze he’d taken over the next several hours had left him with some semblance of peace in his mind and a final bus ride around town seemed a fitting way to reminisce on good times before he shuffled off this mortal coil.

If he’d thought his life devoid of hope and promise before he passed, an eternity stuck onboard the same bus on which he’d expired bid fair to make for a considerably less than ideal afterlife.


This story was written for the weekly Five Sentence Fiction flassh fiction prompt: empty

11 comments:

  1. Made me smile, I like that. But how awful would that be? Great writing as always.

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  2. If that is the case it's going to make you think very carefully about where you end your days! Great story with a touch of dark humour/

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  3. A very thought provoking little story!

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  4. Life can turn curves which is what I saw reading your endeavor for this week

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  5. An empty bank account, an empty heart and an empty death. Sigh. Well done!

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  6. Ditto what Rossandra said! That's empty!

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  7. What an intriguing piece. At the end I laughed -- and then felt guilty. ;)

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  8. Loved this! Great line: "...he shuffled off this mortal coil." Very powerful piece. I'd love to know what preceded this.

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  9. So perhaps there is no real freedom in planning such an escape! I once worked at a place where I bemoaned that my vision of hell would be to die and find out I still worked there for all eternity, so I can relate to this man's sad plight!

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  10. Oh dear. I do feel for this man. Is it wrong that I found it quite amusing at the end? well written- as usual. x

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  11. This story fascinates me! I love the intrigue and bit of resigned humor :)

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