Friday, May 24, 2013

Josiah Teague: Territorial Agent XIV


He hoped all of his efforts and all of the abraded throat pain would prove worthwhile. It was just possible it might convince these Vamps he meant to be the architect of change on their behalf. It might be the first step to righting half a century of wrongs. 

Inclining his head in a brief nod, Teague spoke the words he had so often rehearsed, "Teague, Josiah am I. Territorial Agent yours am I. Speak for you to the Humans will I. Labor for your fair treatment and betterment will I. Pledge my blood and honor on your behalf do I. Thus speak I, Teague Josiah, Agent Territorial."


This snippet was selected for the weekly Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday Snippet and is from a work in progress, Josiah Teague: Territorial Agent (a paranormal Western)  Previous snippets in this series may be viewed here.

8 comments:

  1. That's quite the pledge! I hope the vamps appreciate all his efforts (and give him a throat losing!).

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  2. I see a real turning point here. Will they except him or cast him out? I'm guessing he'll have to prove himself in some way to them. Looking forward to seeing their reaction to his well-rehearsed pledge. Sometimes reality doesn't follow the script.

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  3. I love the formal phrasing of his speech--it's done expertly enough that you don't automatically read it in Yoda-speak, which might be an inclination.

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  4. Interesting. This is the first time I'm reading from this, so probably not the best time to come in on the story/scene. Nevertheless, I hope the Vamps consider his pledge seriously. It was very nicely worded.

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  5. Certainly a very serious pledge, especially considering the audience. A lot of interesting elements at work here.

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  6. I love the wording of the pledge. Sounds so very formal and infused with meaning.

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  7. A very solemn pledge indeed. I look forward to finding out how the vampires respond.

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