Saturday, May 4, 2013

The Wheel Goes Round


Remy recalled a time in his life when carnivals and fairs, parks and boardwalks, bright lights and music were things to be appreciated, savored and enjoyed to the utmost. That time…those sensations…those sentiments were gone from his life never to return again. 

To this day, the thought an improbable mechanical malfunction could derail an amusement ride from its course and, in less than the blink of an eye, take from him a wife and a pair of angelic children still seemed inconceivable to him.

After three years of hospitals, rehabilitation protocols and psychological counseling he’d, at last, been declared well and sent back out into a world which no longer held any attraction to him.

As he sighted through the rifle’s scope, taking aim at his first target aboard the Ferris wheel, Remy decided it had perhaps been a bit soon for the doctors to consider him “well’.


This story was written for the weekly Five Sentence Fiction prompt: festival. 

9 comments:

  1. Well, I guess I won't be visiting the amusement park this weekend after all...

    Interesting and unique take on the prompt - plus a nice use of the photo provided!

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  2. Eegads. Chilling picture you paint with your words. I'd be shooting the ride operators though. *snork*

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  3. Yikes! Very well written, though.

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  4. well-written ugly tale.

    Where was the cooling off period for the weapon and the background check?

    Randy

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  5. Holy crap! Couldn't he just go shoot the operator? Very disturbing, but that doesn't mean it isn't well-written as is all your work.

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  6. Jeffrey, you built this so very well, with the methodical reveal. Horrifying and very well-written. The matter of fact tone in the last line is chilling.

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  7. A very frightening, all too realistic tale. It truly is difficult to understand why people do this against innocent people. Your telling of this tale was well done, though it is obviously disturbing.

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  8. well that's about as dark as it gets when using "festival" as a prompt. Chilling stuff and a unique take on the prompt. Nice Job!

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  9. Dark and well written. I was completely surprised at the turn the story took.

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