Friday, July 19, 2013

Perseverance

Copyright -  Anelephantcant

Though it was hardly an expensive treasure, Anna, nevertheless, took effort to loop the chain around the trunk of a sturdy tree. The shabby bicycle was her only transport in the war-ravaged city and, more importantly, all she had left to remember her Zaide Saul. So much had been lost to her she would not relinquish this.


She smoothed her hair, checking her reflection in the single, unbroken pane of glass the café boasted. She banished thoughts of her youth, of lost love and of university abandoned and made of her face the smiling mask the soldiers within would expect.


The story was written for the weekly Friday Fictioneers flash fiction photo prompt.

8 comments:

  1. I really enjoyed the details you added to enhance the experience.

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  2. Hmm, why do I suspect the soldiers will get something a bit different from what they're expecting? Nice detail and a lot of history in a short space.

    Here's mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/band-of-brothers/

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  3. Wow, heavy. You and Jan above are on the same wave length. Well written with some fine detail in the telling.

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  4. I enjoyed the tension, and the mystery regarding what was coming for the soldiers.

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  5. Sometimes the objectionable must be completed even when we haven't the heart.

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  6. Ohhhh this is wonderful, Such great anticipation of goodness knows what. Love how you made goosebumps appear on my arms :)

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  7. Really well-written story, Jeffrey, one that leaves us with our own interpretations but sets them up adeptly. Good job!

    janet

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  8. Dear Jeffrey,

    A well-crafted story, complete with pathos and desolation.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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