Thursday, August 8, 2013

Monday Mixer Winners, Week 25

Excellent stories just keep rolling in every single week and that is one of the reasons I really enjoy inspiring all of you to write. We're developing quite a community of writers with the Mixer and always growing and I hope all of you come back next week to try again. A word of caution for future reference though: there were some truly excellent efforts that I was compelled to overlook because prompt words were used as different parts of speech than required. Please pay close attention to that detail in future, friends. 




Lizzie Koch for her story An Apple A Day. This is a first-time contribution from Lizzie and a very nice one at that. Five prompt words found their way into this tale of magic and evil intent and they fit together very well. Evil kings and witches don't always see eye to eye it seems. The penultimate sentence of the story I think was a bit too long and rushed the story towards a bit too abrupt an ending though. With this as an example of what I might expect to see in future, I suspect Lizzie will be a very strong contender for higher honors in future.

Rebekah Postupak for her story The Spell. The words this week seemed to lend themselves well to fantasy, fairy tales and magic and this story was one of the 
stronger contenders. Isn't it a shame not every spell goes off as planned? While I liked this story, I think it just might have benefitted from a few less of the prompt words. It just seemed to me to be a bit...crowded.  


Last Krystallos for her story A Somnolent Surprise. I had to laugh at the seriousness of the main character waging such a serious war on the dreaded dandelions. A combination of well-chosen phrasing and descriptive words brought this story to life in my mind's eye as if I were the gardener in question. I enjoyed the fantasy twist of a fairy taking exception to this disruption of the natural order of things in such a volatile way. Beware the true protectors of the lawn, eh?



drmagoo for his Untitled Story. In addition to working in a very admirable number of prompt words, this was an enjoyable tale with no small amount of humor either. Leave it to Death to challenge the order of things by interfering with a hard-working deity bent on performing his duties. The story had a good flow and I had no idea where exactly it was headed until it arrived at a satisfying conclusion. I especially liked the subtle homage to Ayn Rand. Nicely done!

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Laura for her story The End. With this creepy little dystopian offering, Laura managed to make me shiver. I can see something like this happening in that little "gloom and doom" closet I keep in the back of my mind. This tale clicked with me on so many levels. Having been a part of the military machine I can well imagine a government hush taking place. As one who has never cultivated a lot of close friendships, I could also identify with the main characters concerns about facing the end alone. Chilling indeed. 



Please bear in mind my decisions are entirely subjective and may not find favor or agreement with all, but decisions are like that. For those writers not mentioned, no slight is intended and I hope next week will find you back for more.

Here is the link to view and read all of the truly inspired offerings for this week.  Please show a little Monday Mixer love and make a point of clicking on each entry and checking them out. Remember, each link clicked on takes you directly to that particular writer's page and provides them blog traffic and, hopefully, feedback to encourage them to come out & play next week.


1 comment:

  1. Might it be useful to point out grammatical errors, rather than just dismiss entries? Feedback on all the stories, even if brief, would also encourage newcomers.

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