Sunday, September 8, 2013

Monday Mixer Winners, Week 28

Another stellar week for Monday Mixer with high fantasy, the risque, the comedic and so much more woven out of the prompt words. While I'd have liked to post these results sooner, my laptop decided, against all reason, to not only forget I have web browsers installed but additionally decided to forget how to load said browsers. In any event, on to the results!



The Imaginator for his story The Fall Of Yr.  This was a nice little tale that combined sorcery, ambition and consequences together into a very handy bit of world-building. I did feel the repeated uses of the word "sorcerer" might have been better presented with synonyms for the word rather than repetition. When you only get 150 words, it seldom works well to repeat on when another word might work as well and offer some variety.  

Rebekah Postupak for her story The Knights. This was a inventive adaptation of the Arthurian legend. It was interesting to see the knights depicted as something other than the bold and brave defenders of the realm. I have to say though, the concept of Merlin placing them in a state of time out was just a bit too much whimsy in the tale for my tastes.

RogRites for his story Customer Service II. This was a fine example of how easily the male of the species can be distracted from his necessary goal. It also gives "customer service" a rather more unsavory feel than I'd imagine most businesses like to think of themselves. While I liked this story overall, I found the sentences to be a bit too short and choppy for the story to have a good flow to it. 


drmagoo for his untitled story. This tale made excellent use of descriptive phrasing and written imagery to create a very palpable sense of mystery and mystique. The prompt words were worked in seamlessly and did not detract from the whole in spite of their disparity. I enjoyed the paranormal twist of collecting souls for hungry spirits whom the heroine is contemptuous enough to mentally compare to toddlers. If they are toddlers, I shudder to think what the adults must be like. I like it!


Alissa for her story Wannabe. I make it a point to never read any of the Mixer submissions until the window for entry closes so that everyone gets a fair and equal shot to have their story read first. I have InLinkz randomize the display so the entries appear in random order, too. That being said, I couldn't help but see where Alissa made reference to using all nine prompt words in a single sentence and I also couldn't resist the urge to groan. I couldn't imagine how much a thing could work, but I'll be dipped if she didn't pull it off! This was a masterful bit of verbal manipulation combined with some imaginative story-telling indeed. Bravo!

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K.R. Smith for his story The Eyes Have It. When I began reading this entry, my often-impolite inner voice said, "Oy! Not another story of distracting cleavage!!" Well, in point of fact it was definitely not that and tossed in a very nice ending twist to make the decolletage a completely extraneous factor in these negotiations. It caught me quite but surprise and gave me a good, evil chuckle. Excellent work!


Please bear in mind my decisions are entirely subjective and may not find favor or agreement with all, but decisions are like that. For those writers not mentioned, no slight is intended and I hope next week will find you back for more.

Here is the link to view and read all of the truly inspired offerings for this week.  Please show a little Monday Mixer love and make a point of clicking on each entry and checking them out. Remember, each link clicked on takes you directly to that particular writer's page and provides them blog traffic and, hopefully, feedback to encourage them to come out & play next week.


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