Friday, October 25, 2013

Motivation

Copytright - Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Tommy gazed, furiously, at all that remained of his electronic keyboard. It wasn’t the latest tech by a long shot and sure as heck wasn’t a top name in such instruments, but dammit it had been his!

It was one thing for his father to not approve of his choice of artistic pursuits and another thing, entirely, for him to express that disapproval by the unwarranted destruction of his property.

Ironically, by his wanton act, Tommy’s father had achieved his objective. Stuffing clothes into a bag, Tommy prepared to go out in the world and “take the future seriously”.


This story was written for the weekly Friday Fictioneers flash fiction writing photo prompt. This is a special edition of the prompt as it marks the one-year of the wonderful Rochelle Wisoff-Fields having assumed the mantle of sponsorship from the equally fantastic, Madison Woods.  

6 comments:

  1. The law of unintended consequences at work.

    janet

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  2. Sometimes needed change needs drastic action. Great little realistic snapshot :)

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  3. Dear Jeffrey,

    A rite of passage for many, well written and deeply felt.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  4. Dear Jeffrey,

    Wonderful? Thank you. It's wonderful writers who have made this past year great fun. I'm looking forward to another.

    Loved your last line, but I'm not sure you need quotation marks around take the future seriously. Well done story of conflict between father and son.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  5. This is a really good story. But for some reason, I had trouble reading it. Your first sentence would probably work better beginning "Furious, Tommy gazed at all the, etc" And probably "not approve" would work better as "disapprove". However, I disagree with Rochelle, and think the quotations are necessary to show that these are the hated words of his father.

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  6. Sad to say many of us have been through this rite of passage in this way.

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